tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post8444394909945316547..comments2023-09-28T04:45:45.708-03:00Comments on Avatar Lore: Daddy's GirlMichaelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05778854020957942903noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-87006315669178786632010-11-10T14:34:08.497-04:002010-11-10T14:34:08.497-04:00Thanks for
your sharing, it's very usefulThanks for <br /><br />your sharing, it's very usefulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-69381849371779234922007-10-13T02:08:00.000-03:002007-10-13T02:08:00.000-03:00Still, I appreciate the insight. I'm already mull...Still, I appreciate the insight. I'm already mulling over a few ideas on how to work with it.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05778854020957942903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-13017939297270393292007-10-13T01:49:00.000-03:002007-10-13T01:49:00.000-03:00I agree with you about how hard it is to know how ...I agree with you about how hard it is to know how much to explain. It's such a common struggle that I doubt anyone feels like they get it right. <BR/><BR/>Besides, readers have their own preferences and stylistic fashions change, so what seems like too much to one person may not be enough to satisfy someone else.<BR/><BR/>So much of "good" writing, like a "good" suit or haircut, is really just what's in style today.Ann (bunnygirl)https://www.blogger.com/profile/04938134750150653386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-49224551340996732822007-10-12T21:08:00.000-03:002007-10-12T21:08:00.000-03:00Thank you, Bunnygirl.Well, since I really don't do...Thank you, Bunnygirl.<BR/><BR/>Well, since I really don't don't have any Beta readers (sigh), I welcome the comments. I think maybe that part could use some revision. I had actually revised it very recently, and originally there was very little dialogue; but I thought the story needed a little more exposition about magic and psychic power and it seemed a good place for it.<BR/><BR/>I'm already shopping around, in fact. I'm getting ready to send out another query now.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05778854020957942903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-72491080207003675512007-10-12T19:49:00.000-03:002007-10-12T19:49:00.000-03:00I like the family dynamics, and the way the father...I like the family dynamics, and the way the father is in deep denial about what's really going on. Denial is a way of life in my family, so that part felt very real to me.<BR/><BR/>But I felt like the exchange between Linda and Psyche dragged on. I know from bitter experience how easily someone reading an excerpt can misunderstand the big picture and end up making a horse's behind of themselves. It might be worthwhile to look for ways to streamline the conversation, but if your beta readers have no quibble, please just ignore me. I'm working on information about the trees, not the forest as a whole. :-)<BR/><BR/>Good luck with this. I take it the draft is complete? When do you plan to start shopping it around?Ann (bunnygirl)https://www.blogger.com/profile/04938134750150653386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-13333693976214808622007-10-12T17:53:00.000-03:002007-10-12T17:53:00.000-03:00Thank you for the wonderful comments, Thomma! I g...Thank you for the wonderful comments, Thomma! I glad you enjoyed it.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05778854020957942903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8770202368957338391.post-62779396091074885282007-10-12T14:57:00.000-03:002007-10-12T14:57:00.000-03:00I enjoyed reading this excerpt -- thank you for sh...I enjoyed reading this excerpt -- thank you for sharing it! You do a good job of portraying the difficult family dynamics caused by Linda's plight, particularly the frustration of her father as to just what the heck is going on, the stress in the marriage, and above all, the parents' mutual concern for Linda. <BR/><BR/>Sounds like Linda's got some very difficult and frightening times to face, but I'm glad she won't be completely alone -- I liked your portrayal of Psyche!<BR/><BR/>Good luck with this book! :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com