The Short Fiction Blues
I received more comments for my story "Hex Moon" at the Baen' Bar Slushpile. People liked it, at least, and I followed all the suggestions for revision the best that I could. It's just that some of the comments seemed misplaced. With the following sentence, I was told to make sure my tenses match:
"The Covens assembled outside the village, preparing for their journey to Luma territory."
And yet, I found this sentence (and many more like it) in Dave Duncan's Upland Outlaws:
"She walked in silence for awhile, trying very hard to shake off the aftertaste-of-nightmare feeling."
I was also asked how the Bone Wizard knew Q'La's name.
“I know your name. Your brother is mine, and now so are you.”
Well, I thought it was pretty clear when she says, "Your brother is mine . . ."
Maybe I'm wrong. If isn't clear, then I'll have to go back and change that point. No biggie.
"The Covens assembled outside the village, preparing for their journey to Luma territory."
And yet, I found this sentence (and many more like it) in Dave Duncan's Upland Outlaws:
"She walked in silence for awhile, trying very hard to shake off the aftertaste-of-nightmare feeling."
I was also asked how the Bone Wizard knew Q'La's name.
“I know your name. Your brother is mine, and now so are you.”
Well, I thought it was pretty clear when she says, "Your brother is mine . . ."
Maybe I'm wrong. If isn't clear, then I'll have to go back and change that point. No biggie.
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